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This sounds like a job for ... Nate Send a noteboard - 29/11/2011 11:07:03 PM
... SuperNate!

~clears throat~

Here's what I'd do with what you wrote:

I scry you've grown a wishbone there,
Whereon your backbone ought to be.
Your days have sewn more fear than fair,
But hearken child of Eve to me!

If beauty be your head's desire,
Naught but shade shall dance with thee;
And if you hide your heart's true fire,
Soon disaster will you see.

(I have no idea what this third stanza means in your story, so I'mma wing it.)

This curse upon you, note it well,
Choose one path or the other free.
Beyond these roads two, truth I tell,
Lie pains in one or joys in three.

If you within the year uphold
To stand for you and bend no knee,
Then yours shall be a beauty gold,
And peace, and love, my sweetest pea.
Warder to starry_nite

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http://chapterfish.wordpress.com
This message last edited by Nate on 29/11/2011 at 11:07:40 PM
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Oh, Hello there! You guys like to read, right? Well, I need your help! ^_^ [UPDATED] globug0822 - 29/11/2011 07:31:51 PM 600 Views
I'm not really sure there's enough context there to help Isaac - 29/11/2011 08:06:02 PM 307 Views
Fear Darrig globug0822 - 29/11/2011 10:09:16 PM 367 Views
*muse* I'm thinking about the character from V for Vendetta LadyLorraine - 29/11/2011 08:32:34 PM 328 Views
MmmmM... me likes. globug0822 - 29/11/2011 10:10:03 PM 332 Views
To wry from writ will wreak wroth! globug0822 - 30/11/2011 12:25:10 AM 361 Views
"Listen to me very carfully you large oafish fool. You will do just as I instruct or.... Urza - 29/11/2011 08:42:42 PM 341 Views
Try weaving the rhymes Camilla - 29/11/2011 09:01:39 PM 332 Views
Weaving the rhymes? globug0822 - 29/11/2011 10:14:55 PM 330 Views
ABABAB, presumably. *NM* Legolas - 29/11/2011 10:16:14 PM 140 Views
Yes, yes... globug0822 - 29/11/2011 10:18:41 PM 343 Views
Oh. Sorry. *NM* Legolas - 29/11/2011 10:24:33 PM 130 Views
nah... honest mistake... globug0822 - 29/11/2011 10:34:29 PM 298 Views
ah Camilla - 30/11/2011 06:42:01 AM 401 Views
I see. Good point. *NM* globug0822 - 02/12/2011 03:06:36 AM 177 Views
Blergh. It still sounds crap! globug0822 - 29/11/2011 10:36:10 PM 362 Views
This sounds like a job for ... Nate - 29/11/2011 11:07:03 PM 348 Views
the addition of archaic sounding language does a lot. *NM* LadyLorraine - 29/11/2011 11:24:09 PM 159 Views
Wow. globug0822 - 29/11/2011 11:53:46 PM 332 Views
Oh And.... globug0822 - 30/11/2011 12:12:09 AM 342 Views
Alright... here's my second stab at it. globug0822 - 30/11/2011 04:06:10 AM 331 Views
Dust and Sparkles! TaskmasterJack - 30/11/2011 01:36:58 AM 317 Views
Uhm... The thread you were looking for... globug0822 - 30/11/2011 04:22:50 AM 338 Views
I am equal parts embarrassed by and proud/jealous of you; congrats. Joel - 30/11/2011 03:03:20 PM 304 Views
hahahahaha i was so confused there for a second LadyLorraine - 30/11/2011 03:17:09 PM 305 Views
Ah ha. Joel - 30/11/2011 03:56:27 PM 308 Views
globug0822 - 02/12/2011 03:09:51 AM 401 Views
Joel - 02/12/2011 01:44:36 PM 295 Views
BwAhHAhAhHAhaa... globug0822 - 02/12/2011 03:10:09 AM 374 Views
Well, I had a few RL friends who all joined in... globug0822 - 02/12/2011 03:08:49 AM 359 Views
Wait, peer pressure can be a GOOD thing? Joel - 02/12/2011 01:47:06 PM 362 Views
Indeed. globug0822 - 03/12/2011 12:33:43 AM 543 Views
It would. Joel - 03/12/2011 11:38:35 PM 410 Views
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