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I'm glad you two agree with me! Dark Knight Send a noteboard - 24/02/2011 07:03:14 PM
I haven't ever seen that done. Even in third person POV, you are seeing the scene from a specifc person's eyes. If he wants to carry information from inside another person's head, he needs to "show, not tell." In your example, he'd say "In his excitement, Frank didn't even notice Susan's barely suppressed shudder of disgust."

It just feels lazy or something.


It does seem very lazy right? Plus sometimes it can be very confusing. I just don't like it and I've seen this several times before but I can't remember where...
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Third person narrative question Dark Knight - 23/02/2011 08:21:01 PM 1141 Views
Re: Third person narrative question Callia - 24/02/2011 04:14:34 AM 906 Views
So it is focalised through different points of view Camilla - 24/02/2011 09:34:34 AM 956 Views
Re: So it is focalised through different points of view Dark Knight - 24/02/2011 02:30:17 PM 940 Views
It's sloppy. I can't imagine that the result is good. Aeryn - 24/02/2011 05:47:27 PM 883 Views
Agreed. Rebekah - 24/02/2011 05:51:17 PM 840 Views
I'm glad you two agree with me! Dark Knight - 24/02/2011 07:03:14 PM 847 Views
Re: So it is focalised through different points of view Camilla - 28/02/2011 11:04:38 AM 995 Views
like anyhting else if it is done right it can be good random thoughts - 24/02/2011 07:18:15 PM 865 Views
Re: like anyhting else if it is done right it can be good Dark Knight - 24/02/2011 07:24:00 PM 780 Views
GGK Comet Sedai - 25/02/2011 01:38:02 AM 1037 Views
parts of Dune are written in this style aldapelan - 25/02/2011 03:25:38 PM 875 Views
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