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I'm glad you two agree with me! Dark Knight Send a noteboard - 24/02/2011 07:03:14 PM
I haven't ever seen that done. Even in third person POV, you are seeing the scene from a specifc person's eyes. If he wants to carry information from inside another person's head, he needs to "show, not tell." In your example, he'd say "In his excitement, Frank didn't even notice Susan's barely suppressed shudder of disgust."

It just feels lazy or something.


It does seem very lazy right? Plus sometimes it can be very confusing. I just don't like it and I've seen this several times before but I can't remember where...
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Third person narrative question Dark Knight - 23/02/2011 08:21:01 PM 986 Views
Re: Third person narrative question Callia - 24/02/2011 04:14:34 AM 725 Views
So it is focalised through different points of view Camilla - 24/02/2011 09:34:34 AM 788 Views
Re: So it is focalised through different points of view Dark Knight - 24/02/2011 02:30:17 PM 775 Views
It's sloppy. I can't imagine that the result is good. Aeryn - 24/02/2011 05:47:27 PM 731 Views
Agreed. Rebekah - 24/02/2011 05:51:17 PM 678 Views
I'm glad you two agree with me! Dark Knight - 24/02/2011 07:03:14 PM 674 Views
Re: So it is focalised through different points of view Camilla - 28/02/2011 11:04:38 AM 844 Views
like anyhting else if it is done right it can be good random thoughts - 24/02/2011 07:18:15 PM 704 Views
Re: like anyhting else if it is done right it can be good Dark Knight - 24/02/2011 07:24:00 PM 629 Views
GGK Comet Sedai - 25/02/2011 01:38:02 AM 785 Views
parts of Dune are written in this style aldapelan - 25/02/2011 03:25:38 PM 706 Views
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