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I'm glad you two agree with me! Dark Knight Send a noteboard - 24/02/2011 07:03:14 PM
I haven't ever seen that done. Even in third person POV, you are seeing the scene from a specifc person's eyes. If he wants to carry information from inside another person's head, he needs to "show, not tell." In your example, he'd say "In his excitement, Frank didn't even notice Susan's barely suppressed shudder of disgust."

It just feels lazy or something.


It does seem very lazy right? Plus sometimes it can be very confusing. I just don't like it and I've seen this several times before but I can't remember where...
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It's sloppy. I can't imagine that the result is good. - 24/02/2011 05:47:27 PM 746 Views
Agreed. - 24/02/2011 05:51:17 PM 690 Views
I'm glad you two agree with me! - 24/02/2011 07:03:14 PM 694 Views
Re: So it is focalised through different points of view - 28/02/2011 11:04:38 AM 856 Views
like anyhting else if it is done right it can be good - 24/02/2011 07:18:15 PM 717 Views
Re: like anyhting else if it is done right it can be good - 24/02/2011 07:24:00 PM 642 Views
GGK - 25/02/2011 01:38:02 AM 868 Views
parts of Dune are written in this style - 25/02/2011 03:25:38 PM 721 Views

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