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Re: I'd really love someone to do a good job of this. DomA Send a noteboard - 31/01/2012 02:11:42 AM
Cut out all the superfluous dress and sniffing stuff, and make a really good read. The basis of a great story is there; it's just the execution that's lacking.


This always makes me laugh.

For fun we extrapolated from one novel in the mid-series just how many lines exactly are dealing with the "redundant body language" or the descriptions of clothes in one novel.

There was material for about a page in TFOH, which likely means there's something between one to two chapters' worth of it in the whole series, if it was all regrouped, perhaps 3 chapters to account for the books with a lot of Elayne and her wardrobe. Given the number of chapters, it's really a drop in the ocean.

The length of these descriptions is part of the problem, but not the way people usually think: Jordan made them too short and too formulaic, so they rapidly become boring and repetitive, it's not because he described the clothes in too many details.
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Inspired by The Guardian, which books (classic or otherwise) do you think could be shorter? Rebekah - 30/01/2012 02:10:22 PM 1363 Views
What'll happen if I mention The Count of Monte Cristo? nossy - 30/01/2012 02:25:56 PM 891 Views
LOL Rebekah - 30/01/2012 04:30:07 PM 1087 Views
nossy - 30/01/2012 05:05:19 PM 895 Views
The Wheel of Time. *NM* Tim - 30/01/2012 02:59:03 PM 463 Views
Agreed. *NM* Tom - 30/01/2012 03:10:23 PM 363 Views
Hmph. *NM* Tam - 30/01/2012 10:05:04 PM 384 Views
Hmph indeed. *NM* Tum - 31/01/2012 05:38:18 PM 384 Views
<3 *NM* Rebekah - 31/01/2012 06:01:10 PM 346 Views
Exactly. nossy - 30/01/2012 03:26:23 PM 921 Views
I'd really love someone to do a good job of this. Rebekah - 30/01/2012 04:29:01 PM 881 Views
Re: I'd really love someone to do a good job of this. DomA - 31/01/2012 02:11:42 AM 998 Views
The Fires of Heaven is not the best example for that. It was too early. Tom - 31/01/2012 02:31:59 AM 871 Views
Re: The Fires of Heaven is not the best example for that. It was too early. DomA - 31/01/2012 03:35:36 AM 1044 Views
Fires of Heaven had ridiculously slow (and annoying) parts. *NM* Aeryn - 02/02/2012 07:10:45 PM 368 Views
I don't think Ivanhoe really needs to be pruned LadyLorraine - 30/01/2012 03:22:37 PM 923 Views
I remember thinking it was long and somewhat difficult when I read it at 13. Rebekah - 30/01/2012 04:31:13 PM 929 Views
Seconded, but it's been ages and I'd really need to reread first. *NM* Legolas - 30/01/2012 10:33:53 PM 375 Views
Mansfield Park needs a jolly good rework. Rebekah - 30/01/2012 04:34:54 PM 856 Views
In fairness, all Mansfield Park needs to be cut is its heroine... Legolas - 30/01/2012 10:34:43 PM 934 Views
The Karamazov Brothers, or whichever order those words go in. jh - 30/01/2012 08:16:19 PM 888 Views
War and Peace. That second epilogue really has to go. Legolas - 30/01/2012 10:37:28 PM 1008 Views
"Could" be shorter doesn't always mean "should" be shorter. Tom - 31/01/2012 02:18:44 AM 989 Views
Re: "Could" be shorter doesn't always mean "should" be shorter. DomA - 31/01/2012 04:00:13 AM 978 Views
I agree. I would even go farther than that. Tom - 01/02/2012 07:59:13 PM 1024 Views
Re: I agree. I would even go farther than that. DomA - 02/02/2012 12:51:45 PM 1089 Views
I think it's terribel thing to do... but may be The Magic Mountain could be a bit shorter... *NM* aragornital - 31/01/2012 07:28:52 AM 413 Views
I don't really think any book should be abridged Maria - 31/01/2012 09:50:34 AM 996 Views
The Bible. Although I hear it's sort of been abridged before. Palatine - 31/01/2012 04:46:28 PM 963 Views
Why would you cut out Matthew 1? Tom - 31/01/2012 05:11:24 PM 867 Views
Not all of it. Palatine - 01/02/2012 04:14:13 PM 1021 Views
The "begats" shouldn't be bypassed at all. Tom - 01/02/2012 08:10:48 PM 845 Views
Tom. Thanks for that information. *NM* Palatine - 02/02/2012 02:10:34 PM 478 Views
I'd be all for cutting out/reformatting all the bloody NAMESin the old testament LadyLorraine - 31/01/2012 05:23:28 PM 994 Views
Everything by Ayn Rand. Stephen - 31/01/2012 05:46:11 PM 842 Views
Everything by Thomas Hardy HyogaRott - 02/02/2012 02:27:03 PM 896 Views
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