I have no problem with BS' dialogue in your example.
Anonymous2000 Send a noteboard - 27/05/2014 03:52:27 AM
I actually had to read it 3 times to even get your point. The "he said" or "she mentioned" portion of dialogue normally doesn't even register with me. I am too focused on the conversation itself to care much (that is what is critical to the story, not the dialogue "format".
Friendly challenge to Larry and other literary "snobs" on the board.....
25/05/2014 06:44:34 PM
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As it happens, I wrote an example last year.
25/05/2014 07:13:41 PM
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I have no problem with BS' dialogue in your example.
27/05/2014 03:52:27 AM
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Right, but we've already established you don't really care about writing.
27/05/2014 04:05:03 PM
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Honestly, what % of readers do you think would notice this "problem"?
27/05/2014 04:28:25 PM
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A high enough percentage that you felt the need to make this post. :p
27/05/2014 05:38:00 PM
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I would characterize myself as lowbrow with you, but that's one of the things I noticed
29/05/2014 12:13:18 AM
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Re: I would characterize myself as lowbrow with you, but that's one of the things I noticed
29/05/2014 08:35:15 PM
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Wait, aren't Game of Thrones and A Song of Fire and Ice the same thing?
29/05/2014 09:18:31 PM
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GoT (without the "A"
refers to the TV series, ASoIaF to the books *NM*
29/05/2014 09:38:28 PM
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Fair enough, but do you mind me waiting just a little bit?
26/05/2014 04:57:18 AM
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Re: Fair enough, but do you mind me waiting just a little bit?
26/05/2014 09:10:31 PM
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I really should read Irving, I see
27/05/2014 06:10:50 AM
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I've only read one book by him, but The World According to Garp, at least, is a great book. *NM*
27/05/2014 05:20:49 PM
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Promising opening paragraph, yes, but...
26/05/2014 10:55:16 PM
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I think those shifts are part of the character, not something unintentional
27/05/2014 06:08:44 AM
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I proudly claim the title of literary snob, and will provide you with a quick, unscientific example.
26/05/2014 08:15:04 PM
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Huh. Lana Del Rey quotes Nabokov... I had not made that connection.
26/05/2014 11:17:47 PM
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That quote from Lolita sounds like it is from a romance novel with Fabio on the cover.
27/05/2014 03:40:37 AM
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Alloy of Law was great *NM*
28/05/2014 08:16:26 PM
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