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Sorry, that's just not true... fionwe1987 Send a noteboard - 28/09/2012 11:33:59 PM
You are correct that Jordan overdid the "internal stream of thought" a little too much, at times. But the complete absence of such a thing is plan bad writing. The author has to give us some cues about character interaction, be it in the form of facial expression and physical gestures of the people involved, or their tone of voice. That is completely absent with Sanderson. Same with the internal thoughts of the PoV character. They serve a double purpose. They let us see how a character reacts to a conversation, but they're also absolutely essential to showing how the character changes in response to conversation. If Egwene's position vis a vis her trust of Elayne has changed due to Elayne dealing with the Kinswomen, we have to know. Because this is going to have serious repercussions down to the line, and if we see Egwene's thoughts here, her later actions will make more sense, and will not need an explanation either.

The problem is, Sanderson gives us the skeleton of the scene, but none of the actual flesh. Its like disembodied voices are occupying the scene, so much so that there are several instances where the character starts a dialogue in one place, and has then moved by the end of it with the reader clueless as to when this happened. For example, read the scene where Egwene reveals to the Rebel Hall that there are BA among them, and then Moria gets up to run away. What follows is a pathetic mess. Egwene is in all sorts of positions and places as if by magic, and the same with the Sitters.

Rectifying these issues actually doesn't take much space, and as DomA said, actually ends up saving the need for more scenes. Its not a matter of preference. These are basic rules for good creative writing.
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If you have to call someone "my friend" three times in a couple of minutes, he isn't. - 28/09/2012 11:59:13 AM 5954 Views
John McCain has a similar proclivity. *NM* - 28/09/2012 12:26:29 PM 1226 Views
The only people I've ever heard say "my friend" are foreign street vendors - 28/09/2012 01:19:00 PM 1282 Views
Potential customer = best kind of friend *NM* - 28/09/2012 02:20:29 PM 778 Views
I agree in this particular instance. - 28/09/2012 03:38:15 PM 1621 Views
Maybe they have been Quakers all along? *NM* - 28/09/2012 03:39:24 PM 873 Views
Sanderson's handling of character interractions is pathetic.... - 28/09/2012 06:43:48 PM 1526 Views
Now see, here I don't fully agree, or at least think it's a matter of taste. - 28/09/2012 07:21:09 PM 2190 Views
Sorry, that's just not true... - 28/09/2012 11:33:59 PM 1326 Views
A few things. - 29/09/2012 02:40:47 AM 1636 Views
Great rebuttal! Fionwe got burned! *NM* - 29/09/2012 04:00:41 PM 937 Views
Re: A few things. - 30/09/2012 06:07:57 PM 1832 Views
I posted something very similar at DM. Reposting... - 28/09/2012 11:46:07 PM 1350 Views
Re: I posted something very similar at DM. Reposting... - 29/09/2012 01:51:20 AM 1542 Views
Yes! - 29/09/2012 02:26:39 AM 1496 Views
This is one of my biggest pet peeves as well - 29/09/2012 04:56:53 AM 1516 Views
There are people who say that? - 29/09/2012 05:16:58 AM 1354 Views
I complained about this regarding the Forsaken chapter - 28/09/2012 07:34:25 PM 1592 Views
I've long since accepted that Sanderson uses inaccurate terms like "powerful" - 29/09/2012 05:44:11 AM 1594 Views
To be fair, the last Moghedian PoV by RJ might have changed her a bit. - 29/09/2012 03:27:31 PM 1298 Views
Which is the question I brought up in another thread - 29/09/2012 05:29:01 PM 1191 Views
The burning question to me, after reading all of the comments above, is this... - 29/09/2012 08:50:50 AM 1507 Views
Piggybacking on someone else's established characters and near-climax-point plot? - 29/09/2012 03:04:03 PM 1569 Views
Both of you disgust me - 29/09/2012 04:13:16 PM 1466 Views
This is not jealousy, it's being upset - 29/09/2012 07:52:51 PM 1361 Views
They could have hired a ghost writer. They chose not to. *NM* - 29/09/2012 09:34:27 PM 9912 Views
Your crappy taste in books means nothing - 30/09/2012 09:23:51 PM 1873 Views
When did I ever say Eli Manning wasn't a good QB? - 01/10/2012 03:40:21 PM 1257 Views
To be fair... - 29/09/2012 04:36:52 PM 1340 Views
True ... He may not be perfect, and he certainly made some strange choices - 29/09/2012 05:37:29 PM 1258 Views
B-Sand is not a ghost writer - 29/09/2012 06:35:16 PM 2625 Views
Didn't say he should. - 29/09/2012 09:07:45 PM 1938 Views
I mostly agree with this. - 29/09/2012 09:36:38 PM 1583 Views
What is it you want? - 29/09/2012 09:39:36 PM 1496 Views
We want to bitch about an inferior product. Duh. - 29/09/2012 10:00:09 PM 3431 Views
Hmm that's true I guess. Sad though *NM* - 29/09/2012 10:07:25 PM 630 Views
It is what it is - 30/09/2012 12:52:20 AM 1100 Views
Those are not remotely the same thing - 30/09/2012 09:14:49 PM 1386 Views
But they are the same in this instance - 30/09/2012 10:01:59 PM 1322 Views
It's fairly simple.... - 30/09/2012 09:55:52 PM 1540 Views
Thanks for that insightful response... - 30/09/2012 10:37:27 PM 1222 Views
Forgotten Realms is big on clever spells and magic systems? - 01/10/2012 05:27:05 AM 1188 Views
It's more... - 01/10/2012 01:05:18 PM 1951 Views
Did you read Way of Kings? - 03/10/2012 09:14:43 PM 1446 Views
No, nothing but the prologue - 04/10/2012 02:56:14 AM 1224 Views
Re: The burning question to me, after reading all of the comments above, is this... - 11/10/2012 08:22:27 PM 1106 Views

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