Read like it was written by a sixth grader. It was
"Damn, she's a monster...wait, no she's not!"
*Spank Spank Spank*
*Eats beans from floor*
I re-read it twice to see if I had missed something...like a page or two...and nope, piss poor writing.
"Damn, she's a monster...wait, no she's not!"
*Spank Spank Spank*
*Eats beans from floor*
I re-read it twice to see if I had missed something...like a page or two...and nope, piss poor writing.
"Questions Of Control", pages 278-280 
- 27/10/2009 05:26:53 PM
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- 27/10/2009 05:26:53 PM
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I was conflicted by it
- 27/10/2009 06:48:09 PM
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Remind me what the paragraph was about? The spanking? *NM*
- 27/10/2009 07:08:26 PM
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That be it. *NM*
- 27/10/2009 07:09:39 PM
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I didn't find it funny...
- 27/10/2009 07:28:16 PM
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it was rushed, but i did laugh. my first thought was oooh, leigh on tor is going to be pissed! *NM*
- 28/10/2009 05:10:40 PM
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It wasn't all that funny. I thought it rather obvious. *NM*
- 28/10/2009 01:25:13 AM
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Totally agreed. The most disappointing scene I've read so far. *NM*
- 28/10/2009 05:22:35 PM
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I actually hated this scene, I thought it was utterly unrealistic
- 28/10/2009 05:20:29 PM
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Re: I actually hated this scene, I thought it was utterly unrealistic
- 28/10/2009 07:35:48 PM
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IMO, you've simplified it a bit too much
- 28/10/2009 08:24:33 PM
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I understand the reasons why Semi broke down
- 28/10/2009 09:35:16 PM
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It was a little fast, yes, but I think the basic psychological idea of it was sound.
- 31/10/2009 06:52:28 PM
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So humans don't respond to the other "punishments"? They only respond to spankings from gram-gram?
- 18/11/2009 09:25:13 PM
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Good, but ENTIRELY too rushed.
- 15/11/2009 12:26:03 PM
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