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Yes, and punctuation marks go inside the quodation marks, "like so." Aeryn Send a noteboard - 12/04/2011 05:16:55 PM
Run-on sentence after run-on sentence, with awkward words and turns of phrase.

I will probably have to find a good scene from American Psycho.


The "your" was intentional. I find the rhythm of the sentences hypnotically beautiful. It could be a poem. I read it out loud just now, and I still stand by my opinion. Maybe your objection is to the style of prose.
This message last edited by Aeryn on 12/04/2011 at 05:20:05 PM
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