First of all, I found that sex scene absolutely atrocious. It seems to me that Tanith Lee obviously never intended to read that passage aloud because the words just sound all wrong and smashed together in a haphazard way. It doesn't flow, it doesn't drag me along with it the way a good sex scene in a book should.
That's exactly how I felt too. Trying way too hard to sound like good literature, but not sexy at all.
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You mustn't be afraid to dream a little bigger, darling.
You mustn't be afraid to dream a little bigger, darling.
Your favorite sex scene (post here)
10/04/2011 08:04:15 AM
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Cersei and random noble chick, last GRRM novel I read. (like 5 years ago) *NM*
11/04/2011 12:04:17 AM
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This request is causing me a great deal of distress.
11/04/2011 04:12:19 PM
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*nods*
11/04/2011 07:43:48 PM
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You have to type up some samples for me, b/c so far I think your crazy. I love that paragraph. *NM*
11/04/2011 11:42:26 PM
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"you're", not "your". And the paragraph was awful.
12/04/2011 12:28:02 AM
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Yes, and punctuation marks go inside the quodation marks, "like so."
12/04/2011 05:16:55 PM
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No they don't, at least not in my reply.
14/04/2011 05:44:50 AM
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Re: No they don't, at least not in my reply.
14/04/2011 04:38:37 PM
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Substantive critique of that travesty of an attempt at writing:
14/04/2011 06:00:16 AM
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Re: Substantive critique of that travesty of an attempt at writing:
14/04/2011 04:30:58 PM
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The ones in Illuminatus were sometimes hot, and usually pretty funny. *NM*
11/04/2011 07:34:49 PM
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