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Liiiii-eeeeeet! nossy Send a noteboard - 16/03/2013 10:03:35 AM

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View original postIf you are going to give her a glorious death, then something along the lines of: "Bela struggled to regain her feet, but the long run had taken too much out of her, the wound too grievous. With a final exhausted heave, she rolled to her side and let out one last shuddering breath, then fell still."

See, that wasn't that hard, was it? Not to demean your clearly superior writing skills, of course.
View original postFor my money, I would much rather have seen her end up at Shayol Ghul and have Rand ride off on her. That would have been much more satisfying, if a bit on the mushy side.

I thought about that, but I also thought it would be a bit too contrived for my taste.
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