What do you think of this intro?
- 14/12/2009 06:14:51 AM
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I'm not a fan of the first two sentences.
- 14/12/2009 06:42:10 AM
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Well, i know for a fact that he doesn't opening with questions
- 14/12/2009 07:02:03 AM
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Sentence fragments are unacceptable in technical writing. You need to fix that.
- 14/12/2009 06:51:05 AM
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It's like a Pleasentville film review. *NM*
- 14/12/2009 09:54:14 AM
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I actually mention it a few times later. *NM*
- 14/12/2009 08:48:11 PM
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I want to stick a wikipedia-style "who?" in there.
- 14/12/2009 10:53:02 AM
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That's actually how we're taught to write in American high schools...
- 14/12/2009 02:39:56 PM
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Part of my problem is that he hasn't told me what level this is for.
- 14/12/2009 03:04:40 PM
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Aye, but it's an intro.
- 15/12/2009 08:07:38 AM
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References should come at the first mention of whatever it is. *NM*
- 15/12/2009 08:42:27 AM
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It's simply an introduction, my citations and stuff come in a little later. *NM*
- 14/12/2009 08:49:15 PM
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I smell a strawman...
- 15/12/2009 02:25:36 AM
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well it was in response to a prompt which stated people call it the "Golden Age". My hands were tied *NM*
- 15/12/2009 02:20:54 PM
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Stylistically it needs a lot of work.
- 15/12/2009 03:28:24 AM
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Hell, with a critique like that I may start putting up my introductory paragraphs.
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- 15/12/2009 04:37:53 AM
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- 15/12/2009 04:37:53 AM
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