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What do you think of this intro? Blaine Send a noteboard - 14/12/2009 06:14:51 AM
Here's my intro so far to an research paper on 1950s marriage:

When conservative commentators say the “Golden Age” of marriage they are usually referring to the 1950s model. That decade represents an era that is already gone for many Americans where life was balanced, simple, and innocent. A time in American history where a high school education promised a comfortable living and where family values were presented to audiences through television shows like "Father knows Best" an "Ozzie and Harriet." When they evoke the “good old days” it’s the 1950s model they have in mind; a father with a good job, a mother who stays at home and raises the children, and a house in the suburbs with a white picket fence. It’s easy to see the draw of the 1950’s marriage; solid and stable marriages seemingly without the more modern problems of divorce, infidelity, spousal abuse, and discontent. On the surface, everything seemed fine. However unhappiness often lurked beneath the surface, especially on the wives’ side.

I'd appreciate input.
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What do you think of this intro? - 14/12/2009 06:14:51 AM 747 Views
I'm not a fan of the first two sentences. - 14/12/2009 06:42:10 AM 498 Views
Well, i know for a fact that he doesn't opening with questions - 14/12/2009 07:02:03 AM 638 Views
Ahhh, one of those professors. - 14/12/2009 07:22:46 AM 496 Views
Being sneaky, hmmm. I like this idea. *NM* - 14/12/2009 07:59:39 AM 255 Views
It's like a Pleasentville film review. *NM* - 14/12/2009 09:54:14 AM 200 Views
I actually mention it a few times later. *NM* - 14/12/2009 08:48:11 PM 265 Views
I want to stick a wikipedia-style "who?" in there. - 14/12/2009 10:53:02 AM 493 Views
That's actually how we're taught to write in American high schools... - 14/12/2009 02:39:56 PM 487 Views
Part of my problem is that he hasn't told me what level this is for. - 14/12/2009 03:04:40 PM 469 Views
Aye, but it's an intro. - 15/12/2009 08:07:38 AM 438 Views
You presume correctly - 15/12/2009 02:19:07 PM 557 Views
I smell a strawman... - 15/12/2009 02:25:36 AM 501 Views
Stylistically it needs a lot of work. - 15/12/2009 03:28:24 AM 548 Views
Wow, thanks *NM* - 15/12/2009 02:22:48 PM 272 Views
That was a good critique. *NM* - 16/12/2009 01:21:28 AM 189 Views

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